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Article by Colter Nuanez
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grizcountry420
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Yeah, good stuff.. Thanks for posting
Bear Axed said:
Bear Axed, when I look at the gif in your signature, all I can imagine is Morgan Freeman doing the narrative for that scene! :lol:
Nice article. I wouldn't say 7 players were "implicated" in the sexual assault stuff, as 5 of those came from a bogus accusation, i.e. the group blow job, in which the police declined to bring charges twice and seniors won their honor court proceeding and were allowed to graduate. Also, JJ has thrown 4 interceptions, not 3, and Delaney has in fact been a head coach previously. The last 2 are obviously small points. Again, good article.
“For such a long time, we were so dominate in the Big Sky Conference."
“We finally realized that the Big Sky is a tough league and you have to bring your big-boy pant every Saturday,” Kistler said.
If it's your job, get it right. I seriously doubt these guys submitted written quotes. Passive voice throughout. This piece is a re-write. Half as long; again.
[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4php_B1LQiM[/youtube]
“We finally realized that the Big Sky is a tough league and you have to bring your big-boy pant every Saturday,” Kistler said.
If it's your job, get it right. I seriously doubt these guys submitted written quotes. Passive voice throughout. This piece is a re-write. Half as long; again.
[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4php_B1LQiM[/youtube]
harrydoyle1989
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CDAGriz
As you noted, Colter has the job of writing properly and you do not. However, you may want to shoot for more than half of your comments actually constituting complete sentences before your criticize another person's writing.
As you noted, Colter has the job of writing properly and you do not. However, you may want to shoot for more than half of your comments actually constituting complete sentences before your criticize another person's writing.
